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Amanda Coreishy's avatar

'Crickets. Tonight I’ll fall asleep to crickets.'

You might know that in the UK, 'crickets' is a way of saying not hearing anything back from people you are expecting to hear from. So for UK readers this reads like a double entendre.

Zachary Dillon's avatar

We say the same in the States. My dad, my younger brother, and I used to say "crickets" whenever one of our jokes fell flat. Alex longs for silence, but knowing he can never have complete silence, he's willing to settle for a sound that represents the absence of a voice. And crickets are so soothing.

…except for my wife, who's terrified of them.

Amanda Coreishy's avatar

The simple word 'almost' is doing a lot of work here! "Footsteps keep almost rushing in from the bedroom and bathroom." Damn, what a state of anxiety he is in.

Zachary Dillon's avatar

I love that you picked this out. This was my attempt to get at that feeling of anticipation-turned-sensory experience. You're right, "almost" is the hinge swinging that description.

Amanda Coreishy's avatar

"But I know they’ve been here, because everything looks as I left it—in a suspicious way, as if all the objects in the room are holding their breath, hoping I won’t notice that something’s amiss." Wow, this is paranoia: the fact that there's nothing amiss is suspicious in itself.